Thursday, April 11, 2013

Wandering Mind

Posted by Jennifer at 1:07 PM

Hey girls! I meant to post this one yesterday, but I ended up doing a ton of house work. And just to fuel everyone's naughty imaginations, lets say I was dressed as a sexy french maid, complete with alluring accent. ;)

I think this caption turned out better then some of my new work, but it's still just a straight forward story. I tried to capture the heat of the moment for a confused, but aroused sissy. Of course, the first draft almost went in an entirely different direction, so I started over and tried to tighten the whole thing up.

I know most people just like to jump right into the cap and skip all of the talking points for the story, so I'll go ahead and post the final draft, followed by the unfinished first draft.



And here's the first draft for anyone that cares to see. I'm not really all that good at discussing this sort of thing, never seem to find the right words that capture any one's imagination and curiosity. So, please forgive me for not going more in depth.



 

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3 comments:

Caitlyn Masked said...

Great cap Jennifer!

I agree with your edit... the final version is a lot tighter as it just focuses in on the sissy's thoughts. The first version it's obvious that Chuck has already seen her, while the final version plays around with that, leaving more to the sissy's imagination. Just the line 'I won't be able to look him in the eye on Monday' makes it so worth while.

I think if you finished off the first version it would have been good. Nothing really 'wrong' with it after all. But the final version races past 'good' and smiled as it sailed into 'Great' territory!

April 11, 2013 at 2:32 PM  
C B Rigby said...

i'm the sort that does read the whole piece before commenting and liked how the second attempt ended up. i think we see more of the sissies mind.

April 13, 2013 at 7:58 AM  
Viki said...

This is beautiful. I'd love both of those options, and would gladly become a sissy fucktoy to experience them.

May 10, 2013 at 12:03 AM  

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