Instead of scarping it though, I tried to polish it up a little and post it for y'all. I'm not sure what it is, maybe it's the odd ball plot or the fact that I kept it to a single cap and tried to force a lot of teasing and exposition in almost everything they said. Either way, I was just happy to at least have something to show for it.
Great title and I think the follow through was pretty good. The only thing I could fault is that it seems like there are too many voices speaking. Other than that, the plot was fine. Perhaps just 2 guys talking might have made a bit tighter?
ReplyDelete@ Dee Mentia
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear you enjoyed it. I can see what you mean about their being too many voices.
The main reason I went that way, is because most of the time it's always 1 or 2 guys that are talking, and then the guy/girl.
I wanted it to feel more like a gang of street racers, so I added in the third to try and change it up. I guess it was a gamble that didn't really pay off.