Sunday, May 29, 2011
One more taste. 25 pages!
OK, I've been working on this for about a month now and finally got it finished! I'm sure there's some error's in it, but I'm way excited to get it up. I'll let the story speak for it self and do a write up about it tomorrow. It's another Suckubus caption, so if you enjoyed the rest, I hope you like this one. ^_^
It's not fair! I'm supposed to write the best suckubus cap and you had to find a way to blow mine out of the water.
ReplyDeleteI should have thought of a visual segue into the memories from the start. Your thought clouds works perfectly and I might just be "homaging" them soon. And the use of overlaying lettering was an ingenious way of showing intensity.
I loved the layout work throughout, but the back grounds on her first conversations with caitlyn were astoundingly good. It really showcases where your style can flourish in any universe.
I loved the one text box reveal of the Black Widow seeping into the text box and the new power was a great surprise. It really fits the suckubus feel too. Control, mental manipulation, and the fine line between overtaking their prey and risking it all...
Which brings me to the story...gush! so many things to love. Bringing Caitlyn in was such a masterstroke, not the least of which because her name is so fitting. But I love taking her "somewhat decent guy in over his head" character preference and making it such a powerful narrative force. You pity and despise him, but he's surrounded by so much worse that you can't help but feel for him.
I could go on and on, and I might in later responses, but I think my favorite touch was the cruel voyeurism of the widow enjoying his virginal discoveries. It really captures the sick pleasures the immortal suckubi allow themselves to amuse their callous souls. I think it captured that aspect of them better than any of my stories did. Kudos!
Woo! you really make me blush with all the praise Smitty. you had set up so mach I had loved in your own suckubus tale's, I was just learning from the master and applying it here. ^_^ Can't tell you how happy I am to hear that you enjoyed it so much, its like having stan lee tell you how much your version of the x-men is his favorite.
ReplyDeleteThe layouts for all the panels were well worth the hours it took to do them up. and I think the moment between Caitlyn and the widow are some of my best looking panels ever! I want to keep discussing it, but it really deserves it's own post so I can do into more detail about the.. uhh.. details. heh
First off. Wow.
ReplyDeleteThat really felt epic. I loved how you changed up the design for each 'part' of the story, especially panels 8 - 12. I'm not sure that type of design could stand up on its own, but as part of the story it really emphasized that section as something different and special. Beyond the big brush strokes of design, the small details were great too. The altering text styles, the subtle but obvious differences between spoken and thought words was easy to follow. When the widow took over the voice of Tommy, and changed his blue box over black outline to black over blue outline... wow. I knew something was 'off' about Tommy, and it wasn't from his words.... it was just that design cue. And having both Tommy and the widow hearing Caitlyn and Tommy responding to the one side of the conversation was great.
And the story was amazing enough to match up to the wonderful design. The slow breaking in of 'Caitlyn' was great. You hit a lot of my buttons in it, and even found some that I didn't know I had. And the picture selection didn't just match up to the story.. it seemed to be created FOR the story.
I think I could go on for awhile, but it will soon just break into 'wonderful, amazing, beautiful, provocative, sexy, erotic, awesome, fantastic, tremendous, marvelous....'
You sicko ^^ what a great story you launched in there Jennifer, you almost putted Smitty to cry i'm sure what a crazy, crazy, crazy did i say crazy enough? universe you created in here, with every new piece i got shivers in my skin and mentally i was blown away, how much dirtier this will get i was telling myself, don't read it stop, but i couldn't stop reading this piece of shit masterpiece "giggle", really blushing at sometimes, it felt like i ended in the wrong place at some parts, but the story is quite good...
ReplyDeleteIt's really sicko stuff to talk with the father of the girls that you transformed and not leaving not a piece of details in no matter who bothersome it would turn out... >.>
So i was like ok, ok, open your eyes, you are reading this "giggle" don't freak now...
Really awesome work
The best part for me was the mental struggling, but i think you figured out by now, reading my comment...
Hugs and Kisses Alectra
Really good work!
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